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Hunter Lynch has responded to your discussion post in CM107 – Discussion Hey , Your outline is looking good so far. I think that your topic is a very interesting one and it should make for a very good Academic Essay. Your outline was however a little confusing to read through. I want to suggest maybe tweaking your thesis a little bit just to give your readers a better understanding about what your overall paper will be about. I do believe that your topic sentences are very strong though, and I believe that will help when you go to start writing your paper from this outline. You have included a lot of really good facts from your article in this outline, however, I would think about taking a few facts out of elaborating a little more on the ones that you keep. Just to give your audience a little bit more information or knowledge about what is going on in your outline, rather than just having all these facts thrown at them. Overall I think that your outline it really good.collapse
