Social Media Censorship Introduction Thesis statement Annotated Bibliography
No. of Pages: 3 Pages
Paper Style: APA Paper Type: Annotated Bibliography
Taken English? Yes English as Second Language? No
Feedback Areas: Focus/Thesis Statement, Topic Development
Paper Goals: Rough Draft Review Process Evaluation Identify the top three issues your writing
specialist focused on in your rough draft (e.g., paragraph structure, proper use of
quotations, thesis statement, etc.). In what ways were those issues surprising?
Describe what you learned from some of the feedback yo
Proofing Summary:
Hi, Jayson
I’m Stephen, your composition tutor for the Writing Center. I have reviewed your submission and have
several suggestions that will help you revise. Please feel free to contact us through a live chat session
with any follow-up questions or for any clarification.
Below, you will find a revision plan along with margin comments within your paper. Use my suggestions
as a starting point for the revision process. Also, please note that I have not edited or proofread the
entire draft for minor errors, but rather, focused on overall concerns such as idea development. For a
complete look at your grammar and punctuation, please use the Grammarly software available under
“Writing Center” in your classroom.
It doesn’t seem as if you have done this assignment correctly. You are supposed to write a rough draft
of your final paper, which is separate from the annotated bibliography that you did last week. You are
supposed to use the sources that you found last week, and begin using them to make your paper for
this week. Please make sure that you do this.
For your revisions, I suggest focusing on:
1. In addition to making sure that you are writing a paper, you may also want to check and make sure
that you are making this a “global” societal issue, and not just one that the United States has. Looking at
your thesis statement, as well as some of your sources, your paper seems to be focused around this
aspect of “fake news”. While you want to be careful with this (as fake news isn’t necessarily the same
thing as social media censorship), you also want to make sure that you are showing that your problem is
a “global societal problem”. This means that, if you are going to focus on fake news, you must show that
other countries outside of the United States has that problem. Make sure to do that, as you work on your
rough draft, and look for more sources to help you write your paper.
Good luck in the course, and I hope we can help you with your next assignment.
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Please make sure that you are
focusing on how this is a “global”
societal issue. Remember, not every
country on the globe is a democracy.
Make sure that you remove these
hyperlinks when you move them to
a Reference page.
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You should also make sure to
remove any text that shouldn’t be
in your citations.
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